My Favorite Thing
I like sports very much. Every Sunday， I always go to Nan-Hu Elementary School to play basketball or jogging.
Lots of my friends go to play basketball with me on Sunday. We have a coach to teach us how to play basketball well.
On weekend， I usually watch SBL basketball game on TV with my family. I feel excited when I watch the ball game. My favorite basketball player is Tien Lai. He can play basketball very well. Every time I see him play basketball， I feel very jealous.
I want to play basketball as well as he does. I’m sure if I practice very hard， day after day， I can be the best basketball player.
Class ＆ No. ：50501
Name in English：Andy Hsing
Name in Chinese：邢志謙
Date：January 27， 2008
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| 留言者：蔡慧貞
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星幣值：0 |
時間：2008/2/21
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優點：詞句優美， 段落分明， 內容充實， 情節生動， 善用修辭， 標點正確， 內容精彩， 前後呼應， 語句順暢， 輕鬆活潑， 心得貼切
志謙，老師相信以你的籃球的熱誠，一定能讓球技日益精進。老師平常也喜歡看球賽，雖然我們喜歡的球員和球隊不同，但可以彼此分享看球心得喔！
給你一個小建議，你的文章每行都太長了，在電腦上看要移動游標讓讀者有些不方便，下次投稿時，每行的長度減半，大約是一個畫面就能呈現會較好。
ps.本來要給你30個星幣的，可是系統說你已得到最高的30個，不能再給了，看來欣賞好文章要把握機會才行。
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| 留言者：高玉娟
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星幣值：+10 |
時間：2008/2/20
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詞句優美, 內容精彩
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| 留言者：楊勝惠
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星幣值：+20 |
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時間：2008/2/19
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Dear Andy，
Playing basketball and jogging are two great sports. I am sure you will become an excellent basketball player.
Hope to see more of your English writing on the website.
Ms. Yang
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