John wakes up at seven o’clock.After John wakes up,he does excercises.After he excercises,he goes to school by bus.Before John goes home,he reads a bookform nine o’clock to four o’clock。Before he has bath,he does his homework.He goes to sleep at ten o’clock.
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| 留言者:楊勝惠
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星幣值:+10 |
時間:2008/3/10
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Dear Timmy,
1. Please capitalize first letters "John’s Daily Routine"
2. He studies at school from nine o’clock to four o’clock.
3. Before he takes a bath,.....
Perhaps next time you can write about your daily routine.
Ms. Yang
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| 留言者:審稿小組
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星幣值:+8 |
時間:2008/3/9
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內容充實, 輕鬆活潑
建議要分段落,才不會變成"短文"喔!
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